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Several months after the Battle of Earth for the crew of Turles, and rather that smarting from the blistering defeat, they seemed to have moved on. Turles and his crew had actually improved since the encounter. Turles was vastly more powerful than he had been before. For one thing, his saiyan recovery ability almost doubled his strength, just having barely survived Kakarott's attack. But in addition to that, Ai had taken the initiative to stow away as much of the fruit as she possibly could, leaving them with a sizable stash. After he had recovered fully, Turles and everyone on the ship dined on all the fruit, Turles predictably getting the bulk of it. A single fruit had what he estimated was roughly 200,000 units of energy, and he'd eaten no less than a dozen. The scouters they had couldn't measure his total power level now. It was simply off the scale! The other members were by no means weak though, after having eaten a handful each themselves. A single one of them was now a complete match for the entire Ginyu Force.
Not being a fool though, Turles wanted his team to test out their new-found abilities on some fresh meat, as well as weaken Frieza's hold on the galaxy. Next stop... Gamma Base.

Ai was fitting in much better now than she had before, now almost seamlessly intigrated into the team. She also seemed to be Turles's unofficial second in command. At first she didn't notice, but after awhile she realized Turles held her in high regard because he gave her orders more often to maintain the group. Plus the others seemed to ask her more questions, directions and such, also as to what Turles wanted. Who would've guessed? She had authority on the ship! That morning Ai and Daiz were eating in the galley, keeping to themselves when Turles walked past to get to the engine room. Without conciously aware of it, her tail stuck out stiffly as Turles approached, and her tail went back to normal as he left. Daiz noticed and smirked.
"Getting excited around the boss, eh?" he asked, chuckling.
"What?" Ai asked, trying to feign innocence.
"Oh, you know what I mean little lady." Daiz said simply, leaning back in his chair. Ai blushed.
"You're imagining things." Ai declared stoutly.
"Oh? Okay then... Lord Turles! Ai wishes to have a word with you." Daiz shouted suddenly.
"Hey! What're you doing!?" Ai hissed at him.
"What is it?" Turles asked, ducking into the room. As Daiz thought, Ai's tail began to stick out on end, her cheeks a little red.
"Oh, ummm..." Ai paused, trying to think of what to say. Then she had it. She smiled evilly.
"Daiz thinks that he might be able to take you on." she said, smiling. Daiz sat upright in alarm.
"Thats not true!" he almost shouted.
"Would you like a bit of sparring time, Daiz?" Turles asked, smiling, his arms crossed. No one on the ship doubted that Turles could take any of them apart. Daiz was a fierce and tough fighter, but he wasn't in the same league as his leader.
"No sir! You know I'm not that dumb." Daiz said in defense.
"Thats not what you were saying a second ago." Ai provoked, wanting to make Daiz sweat. Daiz wasn't about to have any of that however.
"Thats true. I was saying you wanted to have a different kind of sparring with Turles... alone in the dark." Daiz said. Ai's eyes almost bugged out of her head, and only to further prove his point, Ai's tail stuck out even further than before. Turles was clearly surprised.
"Sh-shut up!" Ai squeaked, her cheeks dark red.
"I rest my case. Boss." Daiz grinned and took his leave. Ai blinked.
"Eh heh heh... Um, can we talk about this later?" Ai asked, willing her tail to go limp as it usually was, but it wouldn't be so. A blaring whine filled the ship in answer. They were coming up on Gamma Base!
Another piece for my buddy [link] as part of our lil' deal!
She's been soooooooooo patient with me, its unbelievable! To make these things more compact, you'll have to wait until the NEXT piece to see a wicked good battle! :D

See ya next time young peoples!

Ai belongs to [link]
Turles, Daiz belong to Akira
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kibalover888 Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2011  Student Writer
ROFL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! XD I love this chapter the most so far! :D
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Predator755 Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2011
I get the impression that you like my lil' stories! XD
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kibalover888 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2011  Student Writer
YES!!!!!!!!!!! I LOVE THEM!!!!!!! I MUST READ MORE!!!!!!! Trust me! I'll go nuts if I don't read more soon! XD You're REALLY good... plus I LOVE Turles! HE'S SO DAMN HOT!
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Predator755 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2011
Wow, seems I have a new dedicated fan! XD
It is on my to do list, but I've been freaking lazy since... well, I finished this piece. XD So sorry, even more sorry to the gal who commisioned me, cuz I keep dragging my heels. :P
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kibalover888 Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2011  Student Writer
lol! and yes, I'm like addicted to the story already! :D I just began to like Turles when I saw the movie (forgot the name and #) and he was hot like Goku, but a bad-boy type, AND HE WAS SINGLE!!! AND I LOVE BADBOYS in stories! They make everything fun! XD What's funny is that I watched the movie about 2 or 3 hours befor I read your story.
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Predator755 Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2011
'Tis movie Three, the Tree of Might. :3
Heh, I'm glad you likies my stories so much! :D
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mastermargo Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2011
XD aaaaaaaaaaaaa thank you so much.
i love this story
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Kidachei-San Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2010  Student Digital Artist
Yay!!!! Ai's tail sticking out! Oh god! :D Genius! :)
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Predator755 Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2010
Heh, you really think so? :3
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Kidachei-San Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2010  Student Digital Artist
Yup! :) I sure do ^^
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Predator755 Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2010
I'm glad! I thought it would be super cute. :3
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Kidachei-San Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2010  Student Digital Artist
Yes it would :meow:
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Predator755 Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2010
Heehee, thanks!
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Kidachei-San Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2010  Student Digital Artist
Your welcome ^^
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Predator755 Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2010
:D
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Strefe Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Well, well, well! Now this really was just a pleasant surprise and a most unexpected one as well! I really didn't expect to login and find that you'd posted part 7 up. This has been a most delightful discovery. :D

I'd like to start by congragulating you on a chapter well written. I didn't spot any spelling mistakes the first time through which either means that there were none, I was too excited to notice or I wasn't noticing period.
Although I'd already wheedled a spoiler out of mewzakuro0608 in regards to Ai's tail stiffening in the presence of Turles, I nonetheless found myself laughing about it as I was reading. :D This is a good thing. I really didn't think I would be able to find that part funny since I already knew about it in advance. But again, I was pleasantly surprised by yourself. So well done, I'm very thoroughly impressed! :D :clap:

I was wondering if you and mewzakuro0608 could mayhap get together and discuss your idea's as to why Turles' crew is so loyal to him? I have noticed that you have constantly drawn attention to their admirable loyalty to Turles and whilst that is noticeable in the Tree of Might movie, I do find it difficult to understand why they take orders from him anyhow. So, I personally would like to see your ideas as to the answer to this question. I also understand that saying that he is obviously stronger than the lot of them put together is a good way of answering my question. But I believe that even amongst pirates a leadership has to start with a reason to pledge loyalty to said leader.

I can't wait for the next part of this delightful story. And again, congragulations on a chapter well written. Do you often write fan fictions for artists?
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Predator755 Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2010
Thank you oh so much for your input! :D
Heh, there might be a few spelling errors, but I'm a stickler about them and try to keep things correct.

Bwaha, glad you liked the tail part! I thought it would be cute. :3

As for his crew, I think part of it might be that they've fought in many battles together, and have grown close. While Turles is tough, he isn't completely ruthless. In the movie he repeatedly tried to recruit Goku and Gohan into his group as allies, even though they were fighting against him. It would appear he isn't entirely sadistic, y'know?

I sometimes write stories for friends just as gifts for being good friends, but now I tend to do art trades, so I can get a bit out of the deal, y'know?
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Strefe Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem! :D
Well, like I said, I didn't spot any the first time around which will mean one of three things. I'm like a spelling detector when I read so if I didn't see any, it's likely there are no mistakes. :D

Hehehe. I didn't like it. I LOVED it! :)

Uh-huh. I see what you're saying. I was more curious as the HOW they came under his command in the first place though. Maybe they too fought Turles in the past but decided to join him when he offered?

Aww, that's nice of you. You're doing a great job with this story anyhow. :D
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Predator755 Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2010
Yay, thank you very much! I hope I got all the spelling right! :D

:D

More likely they were a group of elites sent to conquer various planets in the name of Frieza. We've seen on multiple occasions, most notably in the movie Bardock: The Father of Goku, that small teams of soldiers are sent out to destroy various planets. The only time we see more than a small group take over a planet was Namek, where Frieza pulled out the big guns.
I think Frieza put that small group together, possibly as a special forces team, given their variety and unique abilities, to handle unusual situations, but went renegade after the destruction of planet Vegeta. That sorta makes sense, right?
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Strefe Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
:D I'm pretty sure you did.

Oh wow! That's a good explanation. I can't understand why Frieza would put a saiyan in charge of a team like that though.
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Predator755 Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2010
Yay!

Early on, Frieza saw the potential and ferocity of the saiyan race, hence their initial employment. Frieza always had an eye for talent and power, and most likely would have recognized Turles's ability for innovation and combat expertise. After all, Frieza did keep Vegeta around for a long time for various jobs, even after he blew up Planet Vegeta.
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Strefe Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
:D

True but Vegeta was a special case. I believe he was a 'toy' to Frieza. Turles on the otherhand was a third-class saiyan and just another 'bee' as Frieza describes them in Bardock's movie.
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Predator755 Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2010
Good point. This is all theory I'm presenting of course. :)
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Diamond-Rainbow Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
wow thank you so much :D :hug: Lol it made me laugh so hard when I read the bit where Daiz was saying Ai wants a different kind of sparing with Turles in the dark :rofl: That was awesome lol :rofl: I really like how you portayed them all you're so awesome at keeping them in character :D Thank you again I love it :D :glomp: keep up the awesome and Im excited for the next part ;)
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Predator755 Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2010
I'm very glad that you liked it! :D
Heh, the only reason I didn't merge this with the fight scene was cuz I thought it would be cramming in too much, know what I mean? :3
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Diamond-Rainbow Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
haha I loved it thank you again :D :hug:
Yea I agree with you ;) It would be too much for one chapter :D
I know the next part is gonna also be awesome! :D
Im curious though is Turles going to fight a particular enemey like that one dude Cui or something? I don't know if I got his name right lol :giggle:
Lol by the way I really like how you write Daiz and Ai together it's funny when they argue and try to sell each other out :rofl:
Im curious to see how Turles will act now knwoing Ai's attracted to him hehe :D :giggle:
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Predator755 Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2010
Nah, I think Turles will just wipe out everyone he sees! Maybe make it seem like when Vegeta went into Frieza's ship, freaked everyone out while flaunting his power and then wasted them all. >:3

Heh, yeah, I thought that would be good! XD
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Diamond-Rainbow Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Lol yea thats true :XD: I could imagine him doing that :XD:
Im guessing he is quite close to the super saiyan level now which is awesome :D
Ai will prob get mad knowing freiza killed her dad even though she didn't know him :XD:
haha yea it's an awesome idea great job ;)
It's also so cool how you made her almost like a second in command muhaha! ;)
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Predator755 Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2010
Thanks! Heh, it would make sense though, wouldn't it? Ammond got his patooty kicked, Ai saved their lives, and got a bunch of fruit from the tree on the ship!
Heh, although I can't help but admit that I've left a huge, gaping plot hole. :P
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Diamond-Rainbow Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
haha no worries you're doing a great job with it ;) Bloody hell you portray Ai better than I do :giggle:
Muhaha! Thats so true :D Poor Ammond Ai put him out of his job lol :D Then again like you said she saved them all and saved the day yay! :D
Even though she's not evil and all and still a kind person ;) Do you personalley think that she could change Turles a bit? Like Bulma did with Vegeta :XD:
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Predator755 Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2010
Hahahaha, thanks! :D If I keep portraying her well, think ya could convince Lady to take another request from meh? ;)

Yeah, I think she might!
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